In class writing:

Sam Weed and Julia Rafferty
Analysis of Literary features of the text: 0-5
Both a 4
Exploration of the chosen approach to the text:0-5
Both a 5
Use of Language (Structure): 0-5
3 and 4

Paragraph 1:

Julia:I feel like Julia did a better job telling her experience and showing that she fully understood what was happening throughout Romeo and Juliet.  I really liked how Julia added the text in the 1-2 page.  She clearly pulled important text to backup her explanation of the experience.  When performing she did not write so much fluff and told us what facial expressions she had to do to make her part seem like Romeo.  I felt Julia did a wonderful job and spent a lot of time practicing and writing about Romeo and Juliet.  This is why I gave her 13/15.  I strictly graded her on her language cause there is no such thing as perfect language.  Although, she did use good transition words which helped make her point.

Sam:  Sam also did a great job.  I gave Sam a little lower grade than Julia because I felt Julias write up was a bit better than Sam's when it came to Explaining the text.  Julia used more text than Sam which was very good.  Sam had good use of language just like Julia.  She also did avery lovely job discussing the literary analysis part.

2 paragraph:
I feel I should use more text liines to explain and use up words to fill up my write up.  They both explained there parts very well.  I will try to use better language for my explanation.  I feel I should also talk about what I should have done and what I fixed when performing.  These 2 essay examples can really help improve my own essay.

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