WC Reflection

It has been a while since we have last looked and revised each one of our essays on The Glass Menagerie by Tennessee Williams.  After looking at the rubric and checking off the stuff we haven't and do not have I have come to the conclusion that there is still a lot of work to be done.  My biggest problem is obviously included quotations to back up my evidence in each of the paragraphs that I have written.  In the rubric I would say that 1/6 of the check marks were about good use of quotations.  I obviously earned a 0 for those parts because I never included them.  Anyways,  I have already started to do parts that I completely missed like a title, works cited (For the Book), and word count etc.  After reading my essay over I need more information in some of the paragraphs like the conclusion.  My conclusion is very short and broad.  I repeated stuff in the conclusion that I had previously said in other paragraphs like the introduction.  I must make my essay more detailed, with quotations, and interesting and not as boring.  I feel I should go back and watch my performance on the part that Grace and I performed.  I feel this needs more information and can definently have the lines to make it better.  I know the IB does not want you talking about your partner too much but Grace really helped me become a better performer by teaching me certain tips and where to go on the stage when doing the final performance.  She really affected me as during the whole performance part in a very good way.  

Another part I should also focus on is my thesis.  I feel my thesis is too dull and not seen very well.  My thesis had to be shown to everyone and can clearly tell what I am gonna be talking about in the next few paragraphs.  I feel everyone forgot to express their thesis well enough for it to be truly seen by Mrs. Guarino and the IB people.  The thesis statement makes up basically the whole essay and must be seen and used accordingly.  After reading classmates essays mine defiantly needs improvement but another major part that we all had trouble with is our grammar.  I keep forgetting that the IB people will be looking at our own work and our grammar must be spot on.  There can not be any mistakes throughout the essay.  reading it to yourself multiple times or having a buddy read it will help make the grammar a lot better.  When receiving our overall rubric grade, I was not really surprised with the grade.  I knew it was just a draft and wanted to just write whatever I was wanting to say at the time.  My partner and Mrs. Guarino got very similar scores which shows that I must fix most of this stuff for my essay to improve.  Gathering quotations is what I have to do next to help improve my score on this Glass Menagerie Essay,  

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